The piece I wrote effectively

The DB 15 assignment is both a summary and a paraphrase about the advantages and disadvantages of having all of the US. high school’s morning class schedules changed to start at a later date. Even though I have written several other assignments like this one in this class I felt like I wrote this one more clearly and effectively, because with this one I avoided parallelism as well as using the second person voice. For instance the beginning of my paraphrase starts like this; “ A teenagers brain differs from others, and starts later in the day, as well as stays alert well in to the night. So the problem for most high school students, is all of their classes that start earlier in the morning, but changing the class schedules could be very difficult.” As you can see I stayed clear of parallelism and use the second person, and kept my writing more clear and concise. Making my writing easier for my readers to understand.